An attempt at : Colleen’s 24 Seasons Syllabic Poetry Challenge, No. 7, 11/6/23: The Beginning of Winter (November 7 – 21) Ritto 立冬
Kigo words :
hoarfrost /north winds / fallen leaves
Form attempted : Choka
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hoarfrost exhales – wisps
of icy breaths – seen cling to
fallen leaves beneath
bare trees – bespeaks dormancy
of autumnal grace
nestled in arms tender as
embraced by earths warmth
nature sheltered as north wind
whistles in winters shiver
Beautiful poem, Destiny ji.
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Went over my head!!
But Loved the words used in it
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glad you enjoyed. thank you, Devang 🤍
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Gorgeous, Destiny. I love your line breaks (something I will try to learn from you. The poem simply flows. Loved it.
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(oh no.. I’m fairly new to writing poetry in form… still learning and experimenting… not the best to learn from lol 😬🤭)
appreciated, your words and time.
Thank you so much 🤍🙏🌹
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Ha ha. Your poetry is lovely.
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thank you kindly 😁🙏
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Very very good 😊
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thank you 😁🤗
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So so so lovely, Destiny ❤
Sincerely,
David
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thank you, David.
sincerely appreciated. 🤍🙏🌹
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Hi Destiny, this is a vivid and lovely poem.
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hi there, Robbie.
Thank you so much. appreciated 🙏🌹🤍
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I can feel the chill, Destiny:)
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😬
not a fan of it 🤭😁
thank you, Denise.
appreciated 🌹🤍🙏
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Enjoyed your use of assonance and consonance here, Destiny.
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thank you so much.
truly appreciate your words and time 🌹🤍🙏
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You’re very welcome, Destiny.
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🌹🤍
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Like a magic spell! (K)
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aaaw… thank you, K.
so appreciated 🙏🤍🌹
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Evocative and challenging
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thank you so much.
truly appreciated 🙏
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Beautiful Destiny
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Hi, Brenda.
Thank you so much.
so good to hear from you 🤗
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😁. I’d like to say I’m back. Hoping I am
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hope so too… have you posted. I haven’t come across any yet. WP having issues too 🙄
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Lovely poem, reminds me of the start of winter ❄️
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glad you enjoyed. thank you so much, Pooja. 🤍🌹🙏
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My pleasure 😊
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Brilliance 🫰
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appreciated as always, Kajal 🤍🌹
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Beautifully written!
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thank you so much, Dawn.
appreciated 🤍🙏🌹
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love the transition from autumn to winter in the flow of the poem – perfect beginning of winter
💞Suzanne
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so glad you enjoyed, Suzanne.
truly appreciated 🙏🤍🌹
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Beautifully crafted Choka capturing the transition into winter with vivid imagery. The hoarfrost, fallen leaves, and the whispering north winds evoke a sense of nature’s dormancy. Well done! 🍂❄️
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thank you kindly, Ashish.
appreciated as always 🙏✨🤍
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A beautiful, descriptive poem of autumn scene.
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thank you, Sadje G.
appreciated as always 🌹🤍
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It’s always my pleasure
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🙏🌹
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🩷
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I love this! Beautiful!
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Thank you so much, Jennifer.
truly appreciated 🙏🤍
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Always my pleasure!
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wonderful poem Destiny with the elements of fall so 👍🏽
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Thank you, Cindy. So glad you enjoyed 🙏🤍🌹
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Beautifully written
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thank you so much.
truly appreciated 🙏🤍🌹
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Beautiful 🍂🍁
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so glad you enjoyed.
Thank you so much 🙏🤍🌹
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My pleasure ❤️
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Hoarfrost…..still warm charm of the nature in it. Very evocative and vivid. Thanks always, D..
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pleased you found it so… thank you, J
always appreciated 🤍🙏🌹
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Cold warmth shelter lovely!
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glad you enjoyed, Dylan.
thank you as always 🤍🙏
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…very welcome Destiny ☺️
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🤍🌹🙏
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Wonderful, Destiny. Beautifully crafted.💕
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thank you so much, Grace.
truly appreciated 🤍🙏✨
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My pleasure 💕🙏💕
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Grace, I am unable to like or comment on your post. Says “post unknown”.
seems like a WP issue. 🙏
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WP has been having an issue. They claim to be working on it. Thank you so much for letting me know and for trying to leave me a like and comment. Hopefully it will be resolved soon. 💕🙏💕
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hope to that too. thank you again and welcome too 🙏🤍🌹
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💕🙏💕
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Gorgeous Destiny ❄️💙❄️
It flows so effortlessly ✍️✍️
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thank you, dear Maggie.
glad you enjoyed as appreciated so🌹🤍🙏
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Always my pleasure Destiny 🤗
You are most welcome 🌹❤️
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🤗🤍🌹
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Very nice, Destiny! I’ve always loved the patterns hoarfrost can leave on windows.
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amazing to see, those patterns.
Thank you, Colleen. so appreciated 🤍🙏
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You’re so welcome!
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